Wow, that really felt like a piece of canon. This is pretty much how I assumed Kyouya's feelings to be. The interaction between him and Haruhi was full of tension, just like their scenes together in the manga, and I also appreciate that you included Haruhi's resistance to her sudden status as a love object. She must feel so terribly confused at the whole thing. I think that Kyouya, more than perhaps the twins or even Tamaki, would really appreciate Haruhi for who she is, and not have any expectations for her. But he's powerless to do anything about it. Sad stuff, but this is really the only believable thing for his character.