That was interesting, and I could picture it happening quite clearly - I'm glad you retained Haruhi's spunk, because in a lot of post-series fics I find that she usually becomes overly girlish and sweet, when in fact I picture her more headstrong. And Kyoya would become the the most powerful businessman in Japan, wouldn't he? ^^ I think the dialogue might have flowed smoother if Kyoya hadn't started his last three lines with "Well," but otherwise, nicely done. I also think this would be an interesting starter if you ever wanted to expand your story (it's pretty difficult to carry out a post-series multi-parter, though).